Friday, February 07, 2014

My Eight-Year Old Son, Ladies And Gentleman - The Writer. Below Is All His Own Work.

Death Valley 


Bridge squinted at the shimmering scenery in the distance, the desert sands seemed to stretch for a thousand miles. The blazing sun was slowly sinking and the night sky was creeping in. He pulled his flask out of his pocket and took a long, thirsty gulp of water.
“Rats,” he hissed. “I'm nearly out of gas.” He quickly scanned the arid landscape for a gas station, but all he could see was sand and the dry bones of desert animals.
Bridge slid down the side of his motorbike and sat on the cracked ground, thinking.
All of a sudden dust rose into the air. Bridge looked up, noticing a large truck approaching. He jumped up and waved his hands to let the drivers know he was there. The truck stopped and two men wearing sunglasses stepped out. Bridge held out his hand.
“Am I glad to see you!” smiled Bridge, shaking the bearded man's hand.
“We ain't got nothing better to do, we just spend our days in the desert. Always someone who needs help” he said slowly, staring at Bridge and holding up a container of gas.
“I'm Hank, this is Ray,” he added, pointing to the man next to him.
Bridge jerked his hand back from the shake; it felt cold and scaly. Both men removed their sunglasses, revealing shining violet eyes.
Bridge backed away and the guys knew that he thought there was something strange about them.
Bridge jerked his head around, searching; there was nothing.
Nowhere to run. No gas. 
Bridge slowly reached for the knife on his belt.
The men moved forward and each time their boots thudded to the ground, grey, mirrored scales swept up their bodies, swiftly transforming them from men to giant lizards! Their forked tongues darted from cave like mouths and knocked the knife from Bridges belt.
Bridge stared at the knife, almost defeated, it was too far to reach. Quickly, he grabbed his flask and squirted water in their eyes. As the lizards pulled back, Bridge grabbed the container of gas and splashed it over them.
He took his lighter from his pocket and lit the trail of gas dripping from the overgrown reptiles, WHOOOOOF
A ball of orange flames engulfed the scaly assassins.
Bridge ran to his bike as fast as possible and poured what was left of the gas into his motorbike. He swung one leg over his bike and... a flaming lizard grabbed his leg and started to drag him into the fire! Bridge dug his nails into the sand as he was pulled, but it was no use, he could already feel the heat burning through his trousers. He kicked his legs wildly trying to escape and put out the fire. He kicked the lizard right in the face and he let go. Bridge jumped onto his bike, he'd seen the last of them.
BUT

As he sped away the shapeshifters slowly regenerated back into human form, watching with their violet eyes.

8 Comments:

Blogger InvisibleWoman said...

That's amazing. You must be one proud dad.

6:55 pm  
Blogger Nellig said...

Very cinematic. I could see the whole scene vividly. He'd make a great screenwriter.

Are you sure he's only eight? Bloody hell.

7:35 pm  
Blogger Tired Dad said...

Invisible: Thanks and I am.

Nellig: Thanks. And yes he is, but he's a 'thinker' - no bad thing in my opinion.

9:06 pm  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Oh I loved it! I always wanted violet eyes and regenerative powers.

9:11 pm  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Jesus.

That's the most disturbing submission to Penthouse Letters that I've ever seen.

-Jenertia

12:24 am  
Blogger Tired Dad said...

I shall not be passing that comment on to him.

3:44 am  
Anonymous looby said...

That's excellent--where did he learn the literary skill from? :)

9:55 am  
Blogger BDM said...

Wow. Son blows us away! Tired, get inspired. Your fans hope for more from both of you.

5:33 am  

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